高中申本科文书写作与申请

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Essay 1 (500 words)

Describe an experience in your life which you have challenged yourself and how you have benefited from it.

Throughout my life, I have faced many important challenges and overcoming each challenge has allowed me to discover my innate potentials to succeed on both academic and personal levels. The process of facing challenge itself is agonizing, but what you can derive from the outcome of the challenge is your renewed confidence in yourself and your determination to scale new heights.

As a Chinese student with long-cherished desire to study in the United States, I must first pass a number of English tests like SAT, TOEFL, and even GRE in order to qualify for application. For me, to expand my vocabulary of English by memorizing tens and thousands of English words in a limited period of time is a Herculean task, especially so when I have to do regular coursework which should by no means by affected by my preparation for those tests.

In this past summer, I started to prepare for SAT and, when I had a general idea about this test, I realized that to memorize a sea of English vocabulary would constitute my greatest obstacle. If I could make a special effort by memorizing thousands of words within a month, I would be able to pave a good way for my subsequent steps. Otherwise, my entire plan of applying for an international education would be completely jeopardized.

I started my vocabulary expansion project by first studying the effective tactics and strategies employed by other Chinese students in their similar experiences of vocabulary development. Indeed, I found that much of their experience shed light on my own efforts. After sufficient investigations, I chose a “SAT Vocabulary Package Within 17 Days” which meant that I would have to complete a task which would otherwise usually take 6 months or even longer. I knew that without great passion and perseverance, it would be a mission impossible.

I made a detailed and rigorous plan. According to the schedule, I would memorize new words from 7 to 10 o’clock in the morning and from 7 to 10 o’clock in the evening I must review new words memorized in the morning. For the first three days, my efficiency was indeed high, but with the passage of days there were more and more vocabulary that needed to be reviewed and the review would last until after 12 o’clock. By the 8th day, my brain was totally blank and I almost collapsed, both psychologically and physiologically. In my despair, I said to myself :” To hell with it.”

By the time I woke up the next morning, I was filled with a sense of guilt and remorse. I realized that since I chose to pursue a course of action with tremendous self-imposed challenges, there is no turning back. I had to face the challenge. I told myself to breathe a deep breath and to relax, trying to make up the workload left over from previous days. I learned to make necessary adjustments and have diversions—playing the guitar when I felt too tired and resume the task when fully refreshed. In this way, I endured the most difficult few days and proceeded smoothly. In my complacence, I committed another mistake—I tried to cram more words than I could memorize, to such an extent that by the 15th day, I was amazed to find that I had almost forgotten all the previous ten lists. Therefore I had to spend the next 3 days going over and over them until on the 22nd day, I completed the entire vocabulary book.

Although I failed to complete the task within 17 days, I still consider it a major achievement because I did not abandon it during the hardest part of it. Since then, I have been reviewing them every 5 minutes, 30 minutes, 12 hours, 24 hours, etc, according to the principles as set out in the H.Ebbinghaus’s Memory Curve System, extending my short-term memory into long-term memory.

Although it has been a painful experience, I have benefited a great deal from it and I have every reason to believe it will produce a far-reaching impact on me in the future. It tested the limits of my persistence and endurance and made me realize that every problem has its own solutions, as long as the person involved has a well-developed plan and the determine to fight to the end. I also came to understand the need to examine the experiences of others in a critical way; that is, to assimilate only what is applicable to my special circumstances. Furthermore, it is important that one search for other alternatives when one runs into a dilemma. Flexibility is necessary. Finally, always keep in mind that “more haste, less speed.”

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Essay 2:

A. Please describe your area of interest, how you came to develop the interest, and what makes you so interested in the field?
描述你专业方面的兴趣,兴趣的发展,它为什么使你这么感兴趣。

I am interested in chemistry because I find it exciting—intellectually challenging and rewarding. The moment I started to learn chemistry, I became enamored of this subject, which I thought that it has a special charm of its own.

In many cases, the genesis of an academic interest is closely related to the person who first exposes you to the subject. I think that first of all I should ascribe my interest to my chemistry instructor. He had a unique and interesting way of teaching chemistry—giving students some common chemical reagents and encouraging us to do chemical experiments, make our own observations, and draw our own conclusions. By doing experiments, I produced beautiful crystals, the magic changes of colors, and different kinds of smells, some pleasant and some unpleasant. Chemistry has since represented a wonderful world of sound, color, smell and shape.

My interest in chemistry deepened as I took up an important position of responsibility—the student representative of the course that provided our chemistry instructor with important feedback concerning students’ reception of what was being taught. This position required me to coordinate between the students and the instructor and I myself must excel in chemistry in order to qualify for the job. It gave me a sense of responsibility as well as a sense of pride. Therefore I made extra efforts to maintain my leading position in academic performance. As a result, I far excelled my classmates and I was qualified for participating in a national chemistry contest in which I won the third prize.

As I entered the senior middle school, I have been studying chemistry with greater zeal and passion. Apart from doing regular coursework, I carried out extensive self-education so that by the end of the first year I had almost finished learning all the textbooks for the other two years. Leading a marked edge over my fellow students, I was once again qualified for representing our school to take part in the national chemistry competition for high school students and in this competition held this September I succeeded in obtaining the second prize. Beating thousands of competitors from across the country, I have become convinced that chemistry is the subject that can bring out my maximal potential.

I have studied chemistry not for the sake of chemistry. I am interested in learning chemistry as a foundation for understanding biology and for environmental engineering. I believe that only through an interdisciplinary approach to chemistry can we yield more fruitful results in our research and application. To create and maintain a beautiful environment is the top priority of mankind in the 21st century and I would like to be involved in this sacred mission of contributing to our human welfare with my chemistry knowledge. It is this motivation that makes me so interested in what I have chosen to specialize in.

B. Why you choose this area of specialization? What other information you want to let us know.
b.你为什么选择这个专业?以及其它你想告诉我们的信息。

I have chosen chemistry as the area of my specialization due to many important factors. There is first the influence exerted on me by my mother, who works at a local corporation dealing in environmental protection facilities. She often tells me how the environmental problems are getting worse and worse in our country and how the public awareness of environmental protection must be enhanced. She has shown me a lot of pictures showing the shocking reality of the environmental deteriorations that are happening across the entire country. In my heart I have made up my mind that I would pursue a career path in this field and, among all the subjects that I have been learning in my middle school and high school, chemistry is the subject that is most closely related to the understanding of environmental issues and for the development of environmental technologies. Therefore, chemistry has attracted my special interest among all the subjects I have been learning and I would like to make it the focus of my college education.

Every year, our school takes part in annual chemistry competition and it has become a tradition. In 20xx, as the student representative of the chemistry course (a position which is usually assumed by the best student in the course), I represented my school in the competition that year and I won the third prize. The competition attracts thousands of contestants who are chemistry elites in the entire country and my winning the third prize indicated my distinguished academic strength. With full confidence in my chemistry knowledge and hands-on abilities, I participated in the 20xx national chemistry competition in this September and won the second prize.

I believe I have special aptitudes in chemistry because I have not only won prizes in those national-level competitions but also demonstrated special learning ability. In the first year of my senior middle school, I finished studying the books for the rest two years and have even proceeded onto the organic chemistry and inorganic chemistry scheduled for college education. Compared with my peers, I have laid a far more solid and comprehensive foundation for an exciting undergraduate program.

In addition to chemistry, I have excelled in other science subjects like mathematics and biology. They are supportive courses for my chemistry study, giving me further confidence in doing a job in my future chemistry study. However, I have not focused on academic study only. Instead, I have also made efforts to improve my hands-on abilities. As a member of our school robotics study group, I programmed a robot together with my team members and took part in the 20xx national robot competition, winning prizes in a number of items. In my extracurricular life, I have been extensively involved in local community services and environmental protection efforts. It is been my aim to achieve rounded-development as a student.

The underlying motivation of my present application is developed as a result of my visit to a dozen of top American universities last summer as a member of a summer camp. I was impressed by the dynamic student life, the beautiful campuses, and the first-rate teaching and research facilities in those universities. The visit proved a turning point in my academic pursuit because I am determined that my potential can be best brought out in such a stimulating environment.

C. What experiences did you have that made you choose this area of specialization and what is your objective?
什么经历使你选择了专业和目标?

I have chosen to major in chemistry for a number of reasons. In the final year of my junior middle school, a chemistry course was offered and I was elected as the student representative of the course. It was a position of responsibility akin to that of a teaching assistant. It meant that the person who holds this position must be the best in the subject. This put great impetus to my pursuit of distinguished performance in chemistry and my interest in it became increasingly strong. In the 20xx National Chemistry Competition for Middle School Students, I won the third prize and realized my full potential in the field.

From then on, I have informed my chemistry study with great initiative. As I entered the senior section of my school, my interest in chemistry has deepened more than ever and, so is my understanding of chemistry as an academic discipline, as the foundational science for understanding other science disciplines like biology and medicine. Accordingly, I have been making important efforts preparing for a college education in chemistry by further developing my scholastic aptitudes in it. In the first year of the senior section, I not only completed the regular coursework in chemistry but also, with great persistence and passion, completed self-studying all the chemistry courses for the remaining two years. I virtually completed the 3-year senior section within one year. Throughout my self-study, the office of my chemistry instructor and the library became the places that I frequented most.

In the next two years, I started to prepare for the most challenging the National Chemistry Competition for High School Students for September 20xx. As this competition would involve knowledge beyond the chemistry textbooks used in high schools, I started to study, under the mentoring of our chemistry instructors, college chemistry, covering basic organic chemistry and basic inorganic chemistry. It was true that at the beginning my study was motivated by the competition, but as I really delved into my study, I found that chemistry is such a vast and profound subject that entails my lifelong devotion. Therefore, I paid attention to grasping every item of knowledge so that I could really lay a solid foundation. My reorientation of my mental attitude enabled me to study chemistry with real interest. To receive extra input, I even attended a night school to receive intensive training. All my efforts have paid off—in this competition which was held in the city of Nanning, I won the second prize among a total of thousands chemistry geniuses from around the country.

Taking part in the chemistry competitions on those two occasions have allowed me to discern my true interest, to test my aptitudes on a national level, and to realize my competitive edge over many of my peers. All those make me convinced that chemistry is the field in which my talents and interests lie and I can make my greatest contributions to society.

D. Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken and its impact on you.
请评估一次重大的经历,成就,或你所冒的历险,及其对你产生的影响

My study of chemistry has been closely alloyed with my environmental protection concerns. I believe that one of the essential tasks of us younger generation is to help effect a harmonious relationship between man and nature. Biological and chemical technologies will be the key to the environmental problems. My choice is chemistry concentrating on environmental engineering is influenced by an additional factor. My mother is an employee at a local environmental engineering facilities company and, through her, I have learned a lot about China’s serious environmental conditions and how the country is in woeful need of well-trained specialists in the field.

As a matter of fact, I have already been making my contributions to the cause of environmental protection. Last summer, I visited a sewage disposal plant affiliated to the company where my mother is working with. I noticed that, in the fields surrounding this plant, the vegetables grown by the local farmers were abnormally and shiningly green. I came to know that those farmers used the sludge discarded by the plant after the sewage disposal as fertilizers for their vegetables. I immediately realized that there was connection between the use of sludge and the abnormal color of the vegetables. Therefore, I collected samples of the sludge and, back at school, I tested and analyzed the samples together with several classmates and verified the results together with our teachers. The result was that the concentration of heavy metal ions in the sludge was dozens of times higher than the technical criteria specified by the State Environmental Monitoring Bureau.

In the following week, we prepared an experiment report, containing detailed statistics, analytical results and the predicted damages of the use of the sludge as fertilizers for vegetables. We submitted the report to the sewage disposal plant and to the top management of the company. We proposed that the plant should discontinue supplying the sludge to the local farmers and that the plant should dispose of the sludge in an environmentally friendly manner.

I view this as an important experience and as a major achievement because I was able to use my knowledge find out and to stop an environmentally unfriendly practice. I have demonstrated that I not only have a strong environmental concern but also have the ability and the readiness to take concrete actions to contribute to the cause of preserving our environment. This prepares me to undertake even more important responsibilities in the future.

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Essay 3:

Please describe a potential classmate that you believe you could learn from either within or outside a formal classroom environment. (500 words)

Attending an American college education at the other side of the Pacific Ocean is a totally new experience for me and it is inevitable that I will encounter obstacles and difficulties. Therefore, it would be wonderful if I could make friends with a potential classmate whom I can learn from both within and outside a formal classroom environment so that I can become adapted to a new and dynamic academic environment and become an integral part of the student community.

First of all, an open classroom education in the United States will prove somewhat new to me. It will be important that I become extensively involved in group discussions. As I have chosen to specialize in chemistry, I would first of all learn from my classmate, whom I expect to be a chemistry genius, the basic procedures of preparing and participating in classroom activities. I believe that the preview will not be solely confined to what is to be covered in the textbook. Instead, I hope he may tell me how to do some initial investigations, statistics collection, or how to consult technical journals, periodicals, and research papers to obtain additional input. I expect that different instructors would have different styles of starting his or her lectures, will they also pose relevant questions concerning physics, mathematics, and even environmental science and would it be necessary to make preparations for those possible questions?

I know that doing presentation is the most revealing part of one’s talents and knowledge and I would naturally to do a wonderful job in this aspect. I would like to learn from my classmate as to what kind of language I should use, how to structure my presentation, how to support my arguments and draw conclusions so that I can meet the rigorous requirement of the demanding professors? For the experiment sessions, there will be lots of experiments to perform and team discussions. I would like to learn how experiment reports can be prepared most perfectly and how I can contribute effectively to teamwork in the pursuit of a common objective.

Another important thing is that I hope to be fully involved in extracurricular activities, as I have been an extracurricular activist myself in my current school. I have been the class president and leader of the student union. While at your university, the extracurricular activities I wish to be involved can be local community services, charity work, voluntary services at local organizations and institutions. As far as I know, there are countless student organizations and voluntary service organizations on the university campus. I hope that my classmate can share with me his or her former extracurricular experiences so that I would have a clear idea how to contribute to those activities and how I can best combine those activities with my academic study of chemistry.

As a Chinese student, I am eager to know virtually anything about the United States as a country, its political system, economics, science and technology, culture, and the customs and habits of ethnic groups. I hope that my classmate would be happy to help me adapt to the American society culturally. It is my hope that during vacations I can travel around the United States together with my classmate, visiting all the major hallmarks of American culture. I wish to go to the Golden Gate Bridge to experience its magnificence and majesty, as well as the pride of the American people. Oh, there is also the Statue of Liberty, the symbol of freedom and American dream. I would go to pay my respect to Abraham Lincoln’s statue, to learn how he fought against slavery with usually courage and sacrifice his life for the freedom of the Black. I would also go to visit the birthplace of Martin Luther King, Jr. to feel the power and the eloquence of his “I Have a Dream.” Last but not least, I hope to visit all the major science museums where I can see the first spacecraft and experience the achievements of American space technology and achievements. They used to capture my childhood imagination in such a poignant fashion.

I have so many curiosities to satisfy. All I hope is that my potential classmate would not find me a troublesome person. My study in the United States would be a unique and defining experience for me and I want to make it as rewarding as possible. I believe I have ways to make my classmate enjoy helping me because one day I hope that I can take him or her to my own country and share with him or her the equally fascinating Chinese culture.

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Essay 4:

Everyone has a shortcoming. What is yours, and how has it helped or hurt you?(approximately 250 words)

A serious self-reflection shows me that indeed I have a major shortcoming — lack of sustained patience and mere drive at speed and efficiency. This is precisely what is captured in the warning that “more haste, less speed.”

I joined our school’s Robot Research Team in early 20xx and, after nearly two years of intensive training, we were to participate in a national robot competition. The last month before the contest was the most exciting but the most intense period of preparation. To make our robots more powerful and intelligent, we had to do complicated programming but complicated programming required collective efforts and wisdom. In programming a slope-climbing robot, I was eager to make it a powerful climber and without consulting the opinions of other team members, I spent several evenings completing the programming. When actually testing the robot, we were disappointed to find it could not perform the intended function. Obviously, there was something wrong with my programming and careful shooting indicated that I did not carry out comprehensive debugging and my carelessness made me overlook several key bugs. The day of competition was fast approaching and my mistakes obviously threatened to jeopardize the entire project. All the other team members, as well as our instructors, came to help out by re-examining the program and shooting out the bugs. When we did enter the competition, we managed to win several important prizes.

For me, the most important thing is not much to repent over the past shortcoming as to turn the negative into the positive. The lesson I learned from this case is that individual is always limited in his or her abilities and one must learn to work effective in teamwork. Only by making concerted efforts will we be able to achieve the common objective.

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Essay 5:

Please describe which of your activities (extracurricular and personal activities or work experience) has been most meaningful and why (150 words or fewer).

My most meaningful activity happened in 20xx when I was in the first year of the senior middle school. That year, I became a member of the Robot Research Team and for over two years I was engaged in intensive training on how to design various kinds of robots. Robot Research has been a tradition with our school and every year the team would participate in national contests. The materials we use are Lego Robotics System, developed by the Engineering Department of MIT, which requires strong hands-on abilities and high intelligence, ranging from programming to actual robot production and testing. I devoted myself wholeheartedly to this extracurricular activity. No sooner had I joined the team than I completed learning the C language and started to programming simple robots. Then I proceeded onto slope-climbing robots and other sophisticated robots with novel functions. In many cases, in order to improve our programs, my classmates and I would spend the entire weekend in the lab. In the national competition in 20xx, our team won several major prizes. In those two years, I learned how to work in a team, how to collaborate and communicate with others, and how to face difficulties, all those qualities which have been important to my intellectual and personal maturation.

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Essay 6:

How did you become interested in Boston University? Why do you believe you will succeed here?
你怎样对Boston University感兴趣?为什么你认为会在这里成功?(200字)

Last summer, I went on a summer camp in the United States and I visited some of the most prestigious universities across the country, including Boston University. I visited your beautiful campus and was tremendously impressed by your esteemed university, an internationally recognized institution of higher education and research located along the banks of the Charles River and adjacent to the historic Back Bay district of Boston.

I am convinced that I will achieve full success at your university. As one of the largest independent universities in the United States and with a time-honored history of over 150 years, Boston University has a large and stimulating student community and I will be able to interact with them and to make progress together with them.

In addition, I will benefit from the teaching of the dedicated teachers who are highly accessible to students and who provide mentoring and guidance. Your program has a distinctively practice edge due to direct involvements with the broader applications of various academic disciplines. For instance, the undergraduate program in chemistry I am interested in, provides teaching and research in related subjects like bio-analysis and biology. It is great that your university has anticipated the changing needs of its students while serving the greater needs of society. The broad range of research, combined with a variety of challenging subjects and an extensive seminar programs, provide students with the foundation on which to build meaningful professional careers. All those factors convince me that your dynamic academic environment is most unparalleled and will be vital to my successful undergraduate career there.

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Essay 7:

How will you utilize the academic programs you indicated to further explore your intended major or field of interest?

I am interested in an undergraduate program in chemistry because I find chemistry exciting, intellectually challenging, and rewarding. As the “central science” dealing with atoms and molecules, it is fundamental to understanding other science disciplines, including biology and medicine. Knowledge of chemistry can lead to careers in medicine, law, physical and social sciences, engineering, and public policy.

The program as offered by your esteemed department allows me to learn a broad variety of courses, to utilize state-of-art facilities, and to interact with an activeteaching and research faculty. I will first undertake comprehensive coursework across all the major fields of chemistry such as bio-analytical chemistry, biological chemistry, inorganic chemistry, organic chemistry, photochemistry, physical chemistry, and theoretical chemistry. By laying a solid foundation in foundational courses as well as core courses in the first two years, I will seek opportunities to become a research student. In your program, students are encouraged to begin research as early as possible by discussing with their advisors and course professors and identifying their research interests. As my past chemistry study has always been linked with biology and environmental protection, I will most probably concentrate on biological chemistry as my research focus.

In undertaking research, I will read pertinent literature, learn new techniques and concepts, and try to be at the forefront of knowledge. I hope to join a unique and very close-knit group and learn how to design experiments, how to carry out field study, how to record, verify and present my research findings. Under the mentoring of my advisor, I will try to discover a specific area in biological chemistry and explore my research potential. In particular, I will take into account the special biological and environmental problems in China and attempt to apply my knowledge to those problems. Upon completing my undergraduate program, I will go on to a graduate program because only in-depth research on a graduate level promises to solve really challenging environmental issues.

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Essay 8:

Instruction:

You must respond to three short-answer questions using a total of no more than 1000words.limit two of your answers to approximately 200 words each. Give one question an expanded answer of at least 600 words.

Question 1: Academic Preparation—how have you taken advantage of the educational opportunities you have had to prepare for college? (600 words)

I was born in the city of Xi’an, often dubbed as the “cradle of the Chinese civilization” for its thousands of years of history and for being the capital of several ancient dynasties. This is where the emperor of Qing Dynasty is buried whose tomb contained the world-shocking terracotta soldiers and horses that attracted President Reagan and President Clinton on their visits to China. Born and bred in this ancient city of historical and cultural legacy, I have been much receptive to Chinese traditional values.

In 1997, in the middle of my elementary school, my parents and I moved to Shenzhen, a city which, 20 years ago, grew out of a small fishing village in the far Southeast of the country to become China’s first special economic zone as part of the country’s reform and opening-up campaign where one can witness the country’s most vibrant economy. It symbolizes individual initiative, entrepreneurship, pioneering spirit and vitality. Tradition and modern awareness have been perfectly interwoven in shaping my intellectual development.

I spent my remaining four years of elementary school education at a private school — Shenzhen Oriental English School — where an intensive program of English training was offered. Therefore, from the very outset of education, I have developed a marked competitive edge over my peers from conventional schools in terms of English proficiency. Learning English has made me open-minded and broad-minded, allowing me to appreciate the best of the American and English culture and sowing the seeds inside my heart for a college education in the United States early in my life.

My turning point happened when I entered Shenzhen Experimental School which consists of a junior middle school and a senior middle school. As the best of its kind in the entire city, the school has been implementing a radically pioneering curriculum and teaching system that are designed to keep pace with the rapid changes of the country’s social and economic developments, hence the word “experimental”. Upon entering the middle school, I found that I had some gaps from my classmates and I made tremendous efforts to catch up with and surpass them. With a year’s hard work, I succeeded in entering a key class and my success story showed me that, whatever the challenges, a strong will power is the solution.

In the final year of my junior middle school, we started to learn Chemistry and I was elected as the student representative of the course, serving as a bridge of coordination between the students and the instructor. Being the course representative, I made great endeavors to excel in the course and to be much ahead of my classmates. This motivation served to deepen my interest in chemistry and in 20xx I took part in a national chemistry competition in which I won the third prize. In a speech contest during the science and technology festival of our school, I did a presentation on genes and stem cells, receiving the first prize for my eloquence. In the summer prior to my senior middle school, I finished self-studying the chemistry course for the first year of the senior middle school and by the end of the year I had already finished the coursework for the next two years, and even self-studied the college chemistry (organic and inorganic chemistry). This strong foundation qualified me for taking part in the 20xx National Olympic Chemistry Competition for Middle School Students in this September. My extensive involvements in chemistry learning activities have motivated me to concentrate on this fascinating science of chemical reactions and changes in my college education.

Of course, besides Chemistry, I have used other educational opportunities to prepare for college. I have studied a whole spectrum of subjects including mathematics, Chinese, English, Physics, Biology, History, Geography, etc, so that I have developed scholastic aptitudes in many fields through rigorous coursework and strict training. Not being a native speaker of English, I have made special efforts in English language acquisition by passing TOEFL with scores that are even higher than those of Chinese college students. In addition, I have participated in community services and in charity activities to achieve rounded development in addition to scholastic excellence. I have acquired a strong sense of responsibility, especially the commitment to environmental protection. I feel that, with the accumulation of my knowledge, I have also achieved emotional and mental maturity. Meanwhile, I have always maintained a strong intellectual curiosity. All those educational opportunities at one of China’s best middle schools have fully prepared me for college.

 Question 2

Potential to Contribute—tell us a talent, experience, contribution or personal quality you will bring to the University of California.

Coming from China, I have a lot of things to contribute to the University of California to enrich the diversity of your program. I can share with my teachers and classmates the distinctive Chinese culture, its long history and rich artistic traditions. But I want most to call their attention to the educational problems in China as a developing country. I would like them to understand that the poor economic conditions in some rural areas in China are depriving the younger generation of the education that they are otherwise entitled to. To make matters worse, their lack of proper education is making their regions poorer for lack of well-educated people to exploit the local resources for economic development.

As a member of a delegation of teachers and students of our school, I once paid a visit to an elementary school in an impoverished mountain area 50 miles away from Shenzhen. We brought computers, books, stationeries and money donations to the school children. I was deeply struck by the alarming urban-rural disparities in financial income. Back in my own school, as a student correspondent of the school’s newspaper, I wrote articles about the dire conditions of our peers, which mobilized more students to donate money to offer a helping hand.

If admitted to the University of California, I would like to share with my fellow students my knowledge of the current condition of education in China’s rural areas. I wish that we could set up a foundation that can offer help to a specific number of rural students in a specific region in China. We will see what difference our help could make in changing their destiny and how we can contribute to the society as a whole.

Question 3

Open-ended— is there anything you would like us know about you or your academic record that you have not had the opportunity to describe elsewhere in this application.

While my academic record is a faithful indicator of my scholastic performance over the years, I have taken part in a host of extracurricular events, especially scholastic competitions, as an importance source of developing hands-on abilities and academic knowledge. Those competitions include the 20xx National Robot Competition for Middle School Students in which I obtained the third prize and the 20xx National Olympic Chemistry Contest for Middle School Students. In addition, I have been a member of the Science Study Group. Through all those activities, I have improved my ability to apply knowledge to practical problems, to work in effective teamwork, and to contribute to the ultimate success of a common objective.

Another important aspect about me which my academic record cannot demonstrate is that I have talents other than scholastic ones. I have been practicing the classic guitar from the outset of my junior middle school and have passed the national test (Band 6). In practicing guitar, I improved my patience, attention to precision and to details, and the expression of personal emotions. My talents in playing guitar has allowed me to make important contributions to the student community life because I have participated in art festivals, student gatherings and evening parties as a major player of music. In addition, I have also been a short-distance runner and a member of the soccer team of our school. In those activities, I have learned to be both cooperative and competitive. With my past experiences of extracurricular contributions, I am sure I will become an active member of your student community who can contribute to and enrich your already colorful campus life.

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Essay 9:

Describe the world, family, school, community or city you come from and how they have shaped your ambitious and aspirations? 描述你来自的世界,家庭,学校,社会以及城市,它们如何塑造了你的理想和抱负?

I come from China, a developing country with the largest population whose social and economic development is experiencing unprecedented changes over the past decade. I love this great country which has some of the world’s most spectacular historical and cultural heritages. But China has its own problems. Its economic reform has not resulted in a balanced picture across the country, leaving much of the population poverty-stricken in the rural areas and in western regions. There is an increasingly serious rich-poor polarization. As the country is technologically underdeveloped, it faces mounting environmental problems faced by most developing countries—rapid deterioration of the environment, environmental disasters like sandstorms resulting from human-related ecological devastations, and increasing number of endangered species. As a result of serious environmental pollution, China has the largest number of uninhabitable cities in the world, according to statistics released by the U.N. I believe that to solve China’s ecological problems, apart from enhancing the environmental awareness of the general public, technology is the key. That is why I hope to study chemistry and biology which will give me the necessary technical know-how to contribute to the cause of environmental protection in my home country.

I come from Shenzhen, a southern city which used to be a small fishing village merely 30 years ago. At the very beginning of China’s reform campaign, it was created as China’s first Special Economic Zone and, today, a population of tens and millions of people, it has become the country’s most vibrant economy. Everything is new—new roads, new skyscrapers, new transportation network, new industrial centers, new schools and new looks on people’s face. Every citizen is Shenzhen is proud of the enterprising spirit of the city and everybody is equipped with the individual initiative to achieve their personal success. I am one of the aspiring individuals and, most importantly, I am young and energetic, representing the very vigor and vitality of the city. I am determined to grow as our city grows, to succeed and to embrace a brand new future.

I come from Shenzhen Experimental Middle School, which is one of a limited number of key middle schools in the entire province of Guangdong and the best school in our city. The word “experimental” means that the entire educational system, including the curriculum design, the teaching methodologies and teaching facilities, are cutting-edge and pioneering, employing many effective and successful teaching practices from the Western developed countries. In this dynamic academic environment, I have learned to be competitive, to strive for scholastic excellence. In addition, I have taken part in a number of extracurricular groups like Robot Research Group and in voluntary community services to achieve rounded-development. I have even had the opportunity to go on a summer camp in the United States to experience the stimulating culture and education of the world’s most developed country. Having achieved academic excellence in a highly competitive school, I am determined to make even greater efforts to interact productively with my future students in your nurturing academic community and to develop my academic caliber to its fullest extent.

Finally, I come from a family which has suffered a major misfortune. When I was 12 years old, the disease cerebral hemorrhage took away my beloved father’s life. It was the hardest time for both my mother and me and we were engulfed in an overwhelming sorrow. I told myself that I must be a man of strong will who could console and comfort my mother. I must try to alleviate her grief by proving that I am her good son at home and a good student at school. Now, after those years, I find myself the true support to my mother by achieving outstanding performance at school that has made her truly proud. Although she is remarried by now, those hard years that we have pulled through together has been a spiritual heritage that we both share and I am all the more determined to make my mother proud of herself for her promising son.

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