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                                                Statement of Purpose


Applicant: XXX (Tsinghua University)

Program: PhD/Master's in Petroleum Engineering

“Oil! Oil!” cried the excited traders on the New York Stock Exchange, watching the crude oil price steadily going beyond 100USD/per barrel, creating record highs in quick succession over the last three months. Warren Buffett even warns that 500USD/per barrel would be quite a rather fair price in the not too distant future.

“No oil ! No oil!” cried despairingly the hysterical taxi drivers, ordinary vehicle users, and tractor-driving farmers in many places across China, especially in the South, desperately searching for gas and diesel from one station to another, only to be told no oil to sell. At a limited number of stations where there is, they must queue up for 4 to 5 agonizing hours to be stingily but condescendingly given 20 liters per vehicle, about 4 gallons.

While the entire world is panicking over this “oil famine”, as a student of applied mathematics from China’s most prestigious university Tsinghua University, I am preparing to become a petroleum engineer who can help prevent or at least postpone the advent of this oil famine. While politicians of the largest oil consuming countries criticize one another’s energy policy as triggering the energy crisis, I believe that the solution to the energy challenges that face mankind essentially lies in technology, the technology of petroleum engineering.

There is no reason for me not to be concerned about petroleum industry and engineering. I come from Daqing City, which grew out of the Daqing Oil Field (DQOF), China’s first oil field discovered half a century ago. Since my childhood, I have been greatly fascinated by the restless drilling machines on both sides of the roads on my way to school. The city culture has been predominantly petroleum-oriented. My father himself is the director of the Technical Training Center of the DQOF. In this all-encompassing petroleum atmosphere, I was imperceptibly but irresistibly impacted by the petroleum engineering and my interest it has always been kept alive throughout my undergraduate program.

It was with the highest mathematics score and the top ten overall score at the university entrance examinations among several thousands of students in the entire Daqing City that I was admitted into the Department of Mathematical Sciences. In the highly competitive environment of Tsinghua, sustained diligence is essential to academic excellence. In the fifth semester, my GPA reached 87.15/100 and my performance over the past three years is well above average. The coursework of Tsinghua mathematics students is notoriously tough—in courses like Partial Differential Equations, 1/3 of students would fail. For this, math students win the highest respect in the entire Tsinghua student community for doing the toughest coursework. Studying Topology by James R. Munkres, a math professor at MIT, convinced me that nothing else could be more difficult. Nevertheless, I still managed to score 97/100 in the course. For me, the more challenging the tasks, the more motivated I become.

In applying for your graduate program in petroleum engineering, I find that most of academic backgrounds developed at Tsinghua are highly relevant. I received rigorous training in what is called Science Platform Curriculum, a broad-based program designed to strengthen students’ science background. Under this program, I studied four courses in physics, two courses in chemistry, two courses in biology, and a series of courses in computer science. I studied General Physics A (featuring mechanics and thermology) for three semesters together with physics majors and “A” indicates the highest of the four levels of course difficulty. This will allow me to analyze the physical and chemical properties of petroleum by means of programming and modeling.

Of course, my greatest strength lies in mathematics and the development of mathematical thinking. This firm foundation will give me unique advantages in learning petroleum engineering in that I will be well equipped for reservoir simulation. My mathematics training is especially rigorous as the textbooks we use are often the toughest in the world. For Probability and Mathematical Statistics, there are four courses and I studied A Course in Probability Theory by Kai Lai Chung from Stanford. For Functional Analysis, I studied Principles of Functional Analysis by Martin Schechter, which is meant for Master’s students in American graduate schools. For Calculus, I studied the Mathematical Analysis by Russian mathematician Vladimir A. Zorich. For Algebra, I studied both Linear Algebra (Advanced Algebra) and Abstract Algebra. The list can go on and on, covering all the major fields of the discipline including Operations Research and Numerical Computation. As in some major courses, I achieved some of the highest scores in the class—97 for Advanced Algebra, 91 for Differential Geometry, and 85 for Mathematical Analysis.

The development of hands-on abilities and research potential has undoubtedly constituted an important aspect of my academic endeavors. For my physics, chemistry, and biology courses, I had corresponding experiment courses in which I learned how to design experiments and present my findings. By learning mathematical statistics, I have learned to use SPSS whereas by learning numerical analysis, I have grasped Matlab and Mathematica Software. In addition, I have also done important practices in mathematical modeling. Through Tsinghua’s unique SRT (Student Research Training) program, I performed research on the influencing factors and mechanisms of commercial bonus promotions. My job in determining point of entry, modeling, analyzing the main and unnecessary variables that affect promotion, and the application of mathematical software SPSS, they have all contributed to the final report of “A Comparative Study of the Patterns of University Campus Promotion Campaigns in Telecommunication and Digital Products between China Unicom and China Mobile”.

Outside my academic study in mathematics, I have been seeking knowledge in petroleum engineering. I am lucky to receive special guidance from my operations research professor Yang x x x who has published dozens of papers on oil-gas exploration. He taught me much about petroleum engineering—how to use the geological long-wave and reflection technologies and image processing to locate oil reserves. He has helped me formulate a study plan for the year: first to study finite difference method, finite element, Fortran, and use them to compute and simulate the structure of the geological strata and obtain their images; and then acquire more theoretical knowledge and participate in his research.

As early as last year, I had the initiative to contribute my modeling skills in a research paper that my father completed “Numerical Simulation of Oil Volume Concentration Field of Coalesers Based on RNG k--ε Model” (Journal of Daqing Petroleum Institute, Vol. 31, No. 4, Aug. 2007). Participating in this research taught me much about how to do research in petroleum engineering. Then, in another paper, “The Application of TOPSIS Method in the Optimum Selection of Drainage Gas Recovery Technology” (ibid, Vol. 31, No. 5, Oct. 2007), I am one of the authors and we probed into how the TOPSIS method can contribute to an optimum gas recovery technology out of a multitude of individual schemes. Furthermore, during summer vacations, I made field trips to the No. 2 Oil Recovery Plant of Daqing Oil Field, where a colleague of my father’s is the director. I visited the drilling sites and also the underground operation sites to seek how oil is actually recovered. Those experiences have intensified my enthusiasm for petroleum engineering and I know that I am going to inherit both a family and a city legacy.

Now, with all the necessary preparations toward a graduate program in petroleum engineering, I would like to enter x x x University where the Department of Energy Resources Engineering has been offering top-notch graduate program in petroleum engineering. Through your program, I wish to obtain in-depth understanding of science and engineering fundamentals in the area of petroleum engineering analysis, with special emphasis in the efficient, economic, and safe recovery of energy resources. In research, your graduate program explores such problems as “Where should wells be drilled to ensure that the most oil is contacted? How can trapped oil be mobilized by the injection of hydrocarbon gas, carbon dioxide, steam or foaming agents? How will horizontal wells improve recovery? How can we make the best use of the data we have?” The efforts to discover solutions to those problems involve an exciting combination of fluid mechanics, thermodynamics, applied mathematics and geology, coupled with sound engineering principles. Both your curriculum and your research are closely matched with my background as a student of applied mathematics and my interests in oil recovery modeling.

My first choice would be a Ph.D. program in Petroleum Engineering but I am also prepared for a Master’s program if my existing qualifications do not meet your Ph.D. entry requirements. Through your program, I expect to become a well-trained petroleum engineer that my home country woefully needs. China has become the second largest oil consumer in the world and its domestic petroleum reserves are limited. For this, I am determined to make a difference in this vital field of engineering through a lifelong career in petroleum engineering. As a member of the Tsinghua University Soccer Team, I am energetic and, as a future graduate student, I am strongly self-motivated. I am convinced that I can make a difference. Now that my goal has been set, I am ready for the kickoff and to run for it.

                                        目 的 陈 述

 

申请人:XXX (清华大学数学系)

申请项目:Stanford大学石油工程硕博研究生

      “油啊!油啊!”纽约证券交易所里,交易者们亢奋地奔走呼喊。在过去三个月内中,原油价格持续攀升,超过每桶130美元的价格。股神沃伦巴菲特甚至断言,在不远的将来,石油价格停留在每桶500美元将是正常合理的。

      “没油啦!没油啦!”中国的许多城市中,歇斯底里的出租车司机、普通的汽车驾驶者和开拖拉机的农民们绝望地奔走相告,呼天抢地。他们在城市里绝望的搜寻每个加油站,试图找到汽油和柴油,但最终仅被告知已经无油可售。在为数不多的几个还有油可加的加油站里,他们必须痛苦的等待四五个小时,而得到的仅是加油站吝啬而屈尊地拿出的给每辆车20升(合4加仑)的汽油。

      整个世界都处于“油荒”所带来的惊恐之中。作为清华大学——中国拥有最高声望的大学——应用数学系的一名学生,我正准备成为一名石油工程师,阻止——至少是推迟——油荒的到来。尽管石油消耗大国的政客们相互指责是对方的能源政策引发了能源危机,我认为解决人类面临的能源危机的方法在于科技,在于石油工程领域的科技。

      我没有任何理由不关注石油工业和石油工程。我来自大庆,半个世纪以前就是在那里发现了中国的第一片油田(DQOF)。从我的童年开始,在我上学的上,我就被路两旁永不停息的钻井机器深深的迷住了。在这里,城市的文化也处处由石油而来。我父亲自己便是大庆油田技术培训中心的一位主任。在这种全方位被石油包围的环境中,石油工程潜移默化的影响着我和我的兴趣,即使在我的本科学习中,我也始终关注着它。

      在高考中,我以数学最高分和总分前十的优异成绩,从大庆市的数千名考生中脱颖而出,被清华大学的数学系录取。在清华大学极具竞争力的环境中,持续的刻苦无疑是学术优秀的重要保证。在第五学期,我的综合成绩达到了87.15/100,而我在过去三年内的表现都远远高于平均水平。清华大学数学系的课堂作业之坚难无人不知,在偏微分这类课程中,三个人中就有一个人无法通过。但也是因此,清华数学系的学生赢得了整个清华大学的最高尊重,因为他们的课程之难。我曾师从麻省理工大学的James R. Munkres教授进行拓扑学的研究,证明了没有课程能比这还艰难。但尽管五次,我仍然获得了97/100分的成绩。对我来说,挑战越大,我的动力越强。

      对于申请贵校的石油工程专业,我发现我从清华大学获得的学术背景中,相当一部分都是与之息息相关的。我在名为“科技讲坛课程”的项目中接受过严格的训练,这门课程涉猎广泛,目的在于增强学生的科技背景。在这个项目中,我学习了四门物理课程,两门化学课程,两门生物课程以及一系列的计算机课程。我与物理学专业的学生学习了三个学期的A类普通物理课程(为机械与热学开设),而“A类”则表示这是四个等级中的最高一级。有了这些,我就可以运用设计和建模的方式分析石油的物理和化学特性。

      当然,我的最突出的强项在于数学与数学思维的培养,这个基础牢固无比,将给予我在石油工程学研究中所需的独特优势,因为我将在油藏模拟中准备充分。我在数学方面所接受的训练尤其严格,因为我们所用的教材是全世界最难的。在概率论与数理统计方面,共有四门课程;我学习了斯坦福大学钟开莱教授的概率理论课程,而在美国,这项课程是为研究生开设的。在微积分方面,我学习了俄国数学家弗拉基米尔卓里奇的数学分析。在代数学方面,我学习了线性代数(高级代数)和抽象代数。类似如此的课堂名录还可以列的更长,涵盖了所有的主要学科,包括运筹学和数值计算。在一些主要课程中,我还获得了全班最高的成绩——高等代数97分,微分几何91分,数学分析85分。

      动手能力和研究潜力的培养无疑是我学术上努力的两个重要方面。在物理、化学和生物课程方面,我上过相关的实验课程,掌握了如何设计实验和展现我的成果。通过对数学统计的学习,我已经学会了运用SPSS;通过数学分析的学习,我掌握了Matlab和Mathematica软件。此外,我还在数学建模方面进行了数次重要的实践。通过清华大学独特的学生研究训练(SRT),我对有奖促销效果的影响因素和作用机制进行了研究。我的工作任务主要是决定进入点,建模,分析主要和次要无关的影响促销的变量,以及应用数学软件SPSS,而这些合在一起,便造就了我的最终报告:《中国联通与中国移动在大学校园促销通讯电子产品活动的模式比较》

      在数学之外,我还努力的汲取石油工程方面的知识。我非常幸运的得到了我的研究教授杨鼎辉教授的特别指导,而他本人已经发表了数十篇关于石油天然气勘探的论文。他教了我许多石油工程方面的知识:如何运用地质长波机器反射技术和图像处理来定位油藏。他帮助我制定了那年的学习计划:首先学习有限差分方法和有限元方法,Fortran语言,和使用它们计算和模拟底层结构,获得他们的图像;接下来吸收更多的理论知识,并且参与到他的项目之只中。

      早在去年,我早就主动应用我的建模方面的知识,帮助我父亲完成了他的题为《基于RNG k—ε模式的煤基石油储量集中区域的数字模拟》(大庆石油学院学报,31卷,第四期,2007年8月)的论文。在参与写作这篇论文的过程中,我学到了很多,知道了如何在石油工程方面进行研究。之后,在另一篇题为《TOPSIS方法在排水采气技术优选中的应用》的(ibid,31卷,第五期,2007年10月)的论文之中,作为作者之一,我研究了许多模式,最终搞清了TOPSIS方法在使回收气体最优化方面的原因。不仅如此,在暑假期间,我在大庆油田有限责任公司第二采油厂实地考察,我父亲的一位同事就在那里工作。我参观了打井现场和地下运行现场,亲眼见证了石油是如何被发掘出来的。这些经历都极大的增加了自己对石油工程的热情,我知道我所要继承的不仅是一个家庭,还是一座城市。

      现在,我已经做好了成为一名石油工程研究生的所有准备,我非常希望进入斯坦福大学的能源工程系,在那里有顶级的石油工程项目。通过贵校的项目,我希望能够获得石油工程分析方面的深刻理解和工程基础知识,我得重点将放在有效经济而安全的回收能源方面。在研究上,贵校的研究生项目探索类似以下的问题:在何处打井以确认能够与更多的石油接触?如何利用注入烃气、二氧化碳和泡沫剂以移动被困住的石油?水平井如何改善回收?如何最好的使用我们手头的数据?使人兴奋的是,回答这些问题将需要把流体力学、热动力学、应用数学和地理学在监视的工程法则之下合为一体。作为一名应用数学系的对石油非常感兴趣的学生,我认为您的课程与研究都与我的背景密切相符。

      我的第一选择是成为石油工程领域的博士生,但是如果我现在还不能够达到您对博士生的要求,我也准备好申请贵校的硕士相关专业。我期望在贵项目的帮助之下,我能成为我祖国急需的人才。中国的石油消耗量世界第二,而其国内石油的探藏量却非常有限,因此我已经下定决心,在此核心工程领域改观现状,并将石油工程视为我的终生事业。作为清华大学足球队的队员,我精力十足;作为一位未来的研究者,我动力充沛,我相信我能够改变现状。我决心以下,目标明确,已经准备好为之放手大干一场。

 

 









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